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Offline Ahmed_Abdelaziz

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My story part 2: The shelter
« on: August 08, 2016, 03:09:24 PM »
Note:this is thw continuing of Part 1 so check it out first.
1 pm:
The light of the sun was in my eyes. I felt a hand trying to wake me up.
I looked behind me and I saw a tall man with a beard.
"wake up"The tall guy says.
 I couldn't move so he lifted me to the car,it was a police car.
""Officer chris"" Another officer says
Chris? My dad and ocean was talking about that guy.
""What are we gonna do?"" the other officer says.
""nothing"" Chris says
""What do you mean with nothing?""
""Mohsen was our only lead,now we don't know who is responsible for this drug shit."" Chris says
""What about the little boy?Iam sure that he saw something""Micheal says
""They won't take the testidy of a 10 years old kid in court"" Chris says.
"let me try."Micheal says
""Take your time.""
He looked behind him.
He eyes me. then he says ""Hello little boy My name is Officer Micheal Rodriguez,can you tell me who did this to your father?
I tried to say Mr.ocean the millionaire but I couldn't .
He looked at Chris then he said ""Is he muted?""
"I don't know." Chris says
Then he took out a note book and a pen then he told me to type the name
I tried to move my hands but I couldn't  then Micheal said:he got paralyzed.
""What?!"" Chris surprisely says.
""he can't move or talk Iam sure that he saw something shocking for him""Micheal says.
""We will take him to the hospital then we will see what we can do.""
""Alright""Micheal says.
3 PM:At the hospital
""this case is almost dead man"" Chris says
""It's fucked up""Micheal says
One of the doctors  was doing tests on me in an attempt to heal me but he couldn't  then the nurse took me to the bed to sleep
I tried to sleep but I  couldn't then I saw Chris and Micheal talking with the doctor.
""What's up doc?"" Micheal says
""I won't lie to you his condition isn't good"" doctor says.
""Is there anything we could do?"" Chris says.
""Unfortunately no."" Doctor says.
""Do you know what would cause that to him?""Micheal says
""It would be a very shocking moment for him.""Doctor says
He looked at chris then he said : What did I tell you?
""Thanks for your time doc""Chris says
""Any time""Doc says
""What are we gonna do?""Micheal says
""We are going to close this case.""Chris says.
""Don't say that there is some hope in that kid.""
""Don't be a dreamer you heared the doc he said that he needs a miracle."" chris says
""Alot of people got healed from paralyze"" Micheal says.
""very rare people and don't forget that his dad died and he was the only thing he got now he is gone so he doesn't have any motive to come back""Chris says
""So what now then?""
""They said that they will take him to a children's shelter called "Hope" "" Chris says
""let's see what the criminal lab and forensic medicine will say."" Micheal says
Then they just left.
At this moment I found out that me and my dad are just a couple of papers in a case ,Just a case with officer chris and his partner.
The funny thing that Ocean won't get caught and the killer will be unknown.
Next morning:
Some nurses woke me up.
they had bleak faces.
They lifted me then they put me on a wheelchair  Then we went to the elevator then to the reception then they took me to an ambulance.
I felt that iam just  some goods in a crate.
4 PM:at the ""hope shelter for people of special need""
They moved me inside the shelter,Every one was looking at me like I came from another planet.
They had a big park but It was a shithole.
They took me to a bleak room And they just left me there.
No one entered to see if iam sleeping or not they just left me.
Then I sleeped
Next morning.
I woke up and I saw chris and micheal looking at me,t hey were standing with another doctor.
""Is he getting better?""Micheal says
""Not at all.""Doc says
""Fuck.""Chris says
""Probably he will stay like this all his life."",Doc says.
5 minutes later
Chris's phone rings
""Hello?""
""Alright thanks.""
Hangs up.
""They dound out who killed Mohsen"" Chris says.
""Who?!""
""Lester Philips""
I was surprised that they found out who killed my dad but It was the wrong guy.
""What is the evidence that he killed him?""
""The bullets are the same from Lester's gun""
""What is the motive?""
""I don't know but he got a very bad criminal record Drug dealing Arms dealing etc. probably he had a fight with him and he just killed him.""
""Did they get lester?""
""No.""
""Why?""
""He was found dead in his house from overdose.""
""Alright the case ended then let's get outta here."'
Ocean got away and Iam in a shelter now.
Case closed and  ocean didn't get what he deserved.

To be continued in Part 3
note:There might be some mistakes becuase Ia typing from my phone
The story won't end on part 3 It's a long story though.
Thanks for reading.
« Last Edit: August 08, 2016, 03:22:35 PM by Ahmed_Abdelaziz »

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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #1 on: August 08, 2016, 03:14:11 PM »
Amazing work.

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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #2 on: August 08, 2016, 03:17:58 PM »

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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #3 on: August 08, 2016, 06:00:11 PM »
Good. Better than first part.

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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #4 on: August 08, 2016, 06:07:00 PM »
Good. Better than first part.

did you quote that from merilyn monroe?




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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #5 on: August 08, 2016, 06:13:14 PM »
Good. Better than first part.
There is still alot you are gonna see
btw Thanks!
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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #6 on: August 08, 2016, 07:35:57 PM »
Good. Better than first part.

did you quote that from merilyn monroe?
How do you know?

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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #7 on: August 08, 2016, 08:48:39 PM »
Good. Better than first part.

did you quote that from merilyn monroe?
How do you know?
Becuase I have already written it Iam working on the end right now.

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Re: My story part 2: The shelter
« Reply #8 on: August 08, 2016, 11:45:33 PM »
Good. Better than first part.

did you quote that from merilyn monroe?
How do you know?

dunno, you have a habit of doing that.