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Him.
« on: December 18, 2017, 02:40:36 PM »
Prologue:

And there has been John Syter, lying down in his bed again, lost in thought, so lost in fact that the night had been over and the day started, the sun shone down on him, it's rays greeting his face with their warmth and annoying flashes, which his eyes are used to, still staring into the window contemplating whether to get up and shut the curtains or not. That thought was followed by a sigh, pushing the blanket off himself, sitting up right on the bed, both feet on the ground now, holding his face in his hands, rubbing his eyes - he was exhausted, not due to the lack of sleep but because of the way anxiety seemed to kick up his train of thought, he looked to his side, his gaze sticking to the night stand, scanning it as the alarm watch goes off, it's six sharp in the morning. It's time to get up and get myself in shape he thought, standing up as the blanket slides off his back before standing up right, wearing nothing but black drawers, standing up really showed off his height and fit body, board shoulders, every masculine feature of his seemed to surface as the stretching begun, his abdominal area seeming to be tight, as cliche as it may sound, he had a six pack - his job required him to be in tip-top shape physically. He stood at six feet four inches, his hair is coated in a bronze hue of color, seems freshly cut, making for his appearance - the hair going to the side slightly, dropping below the line set by his forehead.

He walked into the bathroom, washing his face and taking a shower, they seemed to be a routine thing for him, but today they felt necessary more than naught. Walking out of the bathroom, using the towel to dry his face, he felt hands wrap around his back - they were warm, gentle and rather soft - a touch he missed yet all too familiar with, the sensation felt haunting, instead of feeling happy for experiencing it, he was feeling guilt and regret. He turned around to see her face, oh her face, flawless in his eyes, the way she smiled just pushed him further into that wretched feeling, within a blink, she was gone and the feeling remained, he dropped to his knees just wailing and screaming. "ALENA!" That's all it took for him to break down into another session of crying and beating himself up for something he had no control over. Through the tears, he looked at his arms, now full of blood instead of water, looking forward he only saw her face, eaten - gone. He could tell she was agonized, even though there was no flesh left, nothing but bones.

After a good hour of having himself cry it out and feeling like shit, he got back up on his feet and washed his face again, wearing nothing but a towel around his waist, he walked to his closet, avoiding her part like the plague, he didn't want to be reminded - not anymore. He picked out one of his suits, new drawers, black socks and his 'special' event shoe, your typical black suit and tie, he slid his pants on, a shirt, fixed his tie before wearing the jacket - now things seem to take a serious turn, he reached for the back of his closet, grabbing a small case - walking over to the living room, not bothering to turn on the TV because he knows that Netflix seemed to have all her pre-made to watch list and that would kill him all over again. He unlocked the case, taking a gun out of it, a Springfield operator pistol, no magazine seemed to be residing within it, well, he grabbed one and shoved it in pulling the slide back, making sure a bullet was loaded. His entire body was shaking at this point, it wasn't that he never held a gun before, he did on a daily basis, it was the thoughts running through his mind that did. Sliding the muzzle into his mouth, shutting his eyes in the process.

Ka-thud. His heart went.
Ka-thud Ka-thud.
Ka-thud Ka-thud Ka-thud Ka-thud.
It was beating out of control, his hand was shaking.

*BANG.*


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Re: Him.
« Reply #1 on: December 18, 2017, 02:44:35 PM »
lemem guess he survives the shot and is awoken

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Re: Him.
« Reply #2 on: December 18, 2017, 02:48:40 PM »
lemem guess he survives the shot and is awoken
maybe


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Re: Him.
« Reply #3 on: December 18, 2017, 02:52:13 PM »
indeed, this dude has " board shoulders " LOL

You made it sound like he did this over and over again, like it's a time lapse;

Your English is on point and the creativity is good, but what it lacks is that feel to the character and that empathy. All in all, I'd give a dick out of ten, which is the size of your penis.  :-X


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Re: Him.
« Reply #4 on: December 18, 2017, 02:53:06 PM »
indeed, this dude has " board shoulders " LOL

You made it sound like he did this over and over again, like it's a time lapse;

Your English is on point and the creativity is good, but what it lacks is that feel to the character and that empathy. All in all, I'd give a dick out of ten, which is the size of your penis.  :-X
wow
shit
so 10 out 10??????????


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Re: Him.
« Reply #5 on: December 18, 2017, 03:04:07 PM »
indeed, this dude has " board shoulders " LOL

You made it sound like he did this over and over again, like it's a time lapse;

Your English is on point and the creativity is good, but what it lacks is that feel to the character and that empathy. All in all, I'd give a dick out of ten, which is the size of your penis.  :-X
wow
shit
so 10 out 10??????????

if it's inches, then you don't get over 5 bud LOL

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Re: Him.
« Reply #6 on: December 18, 2017, 03:11:29 PM »
indeed, this dude has " board shoulders " LOL

You made it sound like he did this over and over again, like it's a time lapse;

Your English is on point and the creativity is good, but what it lacks is that feel to the character and that empathy. All in all, I'd give a dick out of ten, which is the size of your penis.  :-X
wow
shit
so 10 out 10??????????

if it's inches, then you don't get over 5 bud LOL
no i have 10 inches while not hard, 15 when hard
wtf man


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Re: Him.
« Reply #7 on: December 18, 2017, 05:36:35 PM »
Doki-doki. His heart went.
Doki-doki doki-doki.
Doki-doki doki-doki doki-doki doki-doki.