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Character Profiles / Re: Jacques Philippe Toulouse Moreau [WIP]
« Last post by K3im4 on March 16, 2018, 05:01:20 PM »

New Update
Character Sheet was added.

Mage Applications / Re: Triss Holler | Arete 4 | Avatar Rating 4 | Virtual Adept
« Last post by Iron on March 16, 2018, 04:37:34 PM »
Please read this carefully.

IC Questions

IC question 3, contradicts itself
IC question 4, no mention of the different essences.
ic question 6, incorrect
ic question7, could you give me an example of what your mage's drive/purpose be if it were created?
ic question 9, you contradict yourself again

a little technicallity, a mage arete 4 cant be 21 years old unless he/she is exceptional. I suggest going towards late twenties aleast.

You discard instuments when you apply for a higher level arete. Since this is a new character there is no need to write that down.

the first part of the story doesn't make sense. The characters parents need to be super rich to be able to pull anything there off. If the child was provided everything from them at that age, then by 1988 the internet was not invented to the public yet, unless the parents were involved in its creation.
To add to that, the character can't be based off a famous entity or atleast be the maker of one of the first big viruses at the age of 10 years old. Again, it does not make sense.

Forums weren't a thing until atleast 1997 unless it was a local network which only existed for libraries, universties and so on. Gaining money online at the time was unimaginable unless the child at the age of 10 went outside to meet strangers and conduct deals with them.

Again, your story can be a child prodogy if only it was written with realisim. A child cant run off with a heavy computer on her own. Especially at the age 14, leaving the house on her own does not make too much sense.

Where does Stratos come from? How does he take in the paradox if its a AI? The AI isn't your avatar as you say so you need to answer these questions in your story.

Here are a few tips to recreate your story.
- If the story is in first person view, the charcater would not refer to the usual terms. A VA wouldn't divid his powers into spheres.
- Less [ spoiler ] tags please!
- Make it realistic. Most mages are not exceptional people until they get their powers, and even then, they aren't.
- VAs can be snotty brats which is fine, but think if what you are writting would probably need a background for it or if it makes sense?
- Read about the creation of the internet abit, see when things popped up like forums, social media and such.
ooc questions

Question 3 and 4, mages are already technically being hunted down. Try to think realistically if it can happen or not and why it would happen.

Question 6, it iss pretty lightly answered. Doesn't cover everything that is asked.

I am "tearing" into this because you are requesting a very high mage character and it feels like its your first one.

I want you to reanswer from what I wrote, and rewrite your story corresponding to the comments. 
Can you also list with your characters what race they were?

I feel like this is pretty unrealistic, therefore an avatar rating of 4 isn't acceptable for such a thing, and arete level 4 isn't as well.
This is nothing personal, but for a high leveled character we are looking for more realisim.

Feel free to ask me anything around this application.
Mage Applications / Re: Damon Grey | Arete 3 | Avatar Rating 4 | Order of Hermes
« Last post by Mikey on March 16, 2018, 03:41:59 PM »
Mage Applications / Re: Damon Grey | Arete 3 | Avatar Rating 4 | Order of Hermes
« Last post by Iron on March 16, 2018, 02:46:56 PM »
IC answers are great
OOC answers are great
The story is feeling a bit half-baked. The avatar is represented well here (not worthy of level 4 though). There are no mentions of how the character learns some of his spheres at least.

Edit the story, add the missing parts. And re-review it before sending it in (a lot of typos).
Character Profiles / Re: Katarina
« Last post by $hadow on March 16, 2018, 11:36:03 AM »
Added some new thingies
Character Profiles / Re: Hona Amai [WIP]
« Last post by Hades on March 15, 2018, 07:47:00 PM »
Beer pong champion from 1996 to 1999.

The kitsune would make his way around the town, observing the poster, as he just chuckles and shakes his head seemingly amused, as he then makes his way into the forest towards the outpost with a big smile on his face and his blade by his side.
Character Profiles / Re: Hona Amai [WIP]
« Last post by Mikey on March 15, 2018, 12:26:50 PM »
o shit hona's back
Character Profiles / Re: Hona Amai [WIP]
« Last post by Dwayne_Bentlys on March 15, 2018, 06:53:02 AM »
sheep shagger
I know this is a goat buuuut-...

Character Profiles / Re: Hona Amai [WIP]
« Last post by Jackiee on March 15, 2018, 05:50:47 AM »
sheep shagger
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