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Offline Dwayne_Bentlys

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Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« on: March 19, 2014, 09:46:51 AM »
*Radio broadcasts on all radio freq*
"Good evenin' everyone, how ya'll feelin' tonight? We gon' spice up this night with another Dwayne Bentlys freestyle! This one is abit touching - enjoy"

*Radio goes static and the instrumental plays*
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SggbHTCkB80
*Rap starts at 22 seconds in the instrumental*

“Why chu’ leave me?”
Ay’ gurl, dis fo’ chu’ an’ chu know who chu’ are…

I miss chu’ baby and maybe you can take me back? Promise to get of this crap called crack, please call me back.. 
Sorry that I talked a lot of whack but can chu’ please bounce back? Sorry that I was bein slack, guess that’s why im writing this track? Yes ill admit what I did deserved a slap but please lets recap on this relationship? We had that interrelationship gurl I think chu’ just sunk ma’ ship and broke ma’ heart to tiny bits!
I think there has been a britz and ma’ heart just wont start.. Looks like chu’ just took ma’ heart but be weary cause I gotta a spare part.. Lets give this a fresh start? This time lets be smart? I hope chu’ are happy while im unhappy my moods gone from good to snappy and crabby..

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Re: Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« Reply #1 on: March 19, 2014, 11:02:57 AM »
(( Weak, I don't like the concept of the song, also if you can actually record yourself rapping it and make an video, it'll be cool. Just an advice, adios. ))

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Re: Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« Reply #2 on: March 19, 2014, 11:46:11 AM »
(( Weak, I don't like the concept of the song, also if you can actually record yourself rapping it and make an video, it'll be cool. Just an advice, adios. ))
Thank you for the feedback in what way is it weak? I would like to know so i can improve on my raps. :) And the concept? Could you explain that a little more?

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Re: Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« Reply #3 on: March 19, 2014, 06:03:04 PM »
That's honestly awesome, good job.

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Re: Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« Reply #4 on: March 19, 2014, 06:47:50 PM »
“Why chu’ leave me?”
Ay’ gurl, dis fo’ chu’ an’ chu know who chu’ are…

Frey shuts down the radio.

"... Just no."

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Re: Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« Reply #5 on: March 19, 2014, 08:31:55 PM »
Promise to get of this crap called crack,
Love this rhyme))
TagTag you are a fucking shit person in life - Nico you are my true love


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Re: Dwaynes NEWSET freestyle
« Reply #6 on: March 19, 2014, 09:42:59 PM »
*An farmer turns on the radio and listens to the song that is playing*
'What kind of crap is this,eh?
*Changes the frequency to a county song*
'This is something!'



(lol no hate
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